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The League of Prey by flame7926

Sometimes quarantine isn't a bad thing 

The League of Prey follows Elie, a teenaged girl, who is miserable in school and her town, and longs for college as an escape. Little does she know that her small city is soon going to be the center of attention.

Disaster strikes one day, and nothing is ever the same. No zombies were created, nothing like that, yet the town is still under quarantine. No outgoing communications are available yet mail and news are received like normal. Somehow, life mostly manages to goes on as if nothing happened, but people loose some of their inhibitions. For a bored teenager looking for excitement, thrills are suddenly to be found everywhere, including in mysterious letters from the outside: contracts to thieve.

Note: The League of Prey is unfinished, with no recent updates.  It contains pervasive harsh language; also, some graphic violence.

A serialized novel, with no recent updates

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Listed: Dec 15, 2013


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By Fiona Gregory, editor

Jan 7, 2014: I found this story pretty ridiculous, but it did keep me reading for several chapers. I was bothered by an unrealistic depiction of teenagers and high school life, but intrigued by the way the almost amoral protagonist justifies her actions to herself and those around her, and the general mystery of the plot. It doesn’t really make any sense so far, so be prepared to suspend lots of disbelief.

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The main character is a jerk. Her friends are nice, though.

By Underwhelming Force, author of Sins of the Fathers

Mar 6, 2014: [edit as of march 19 2014] The League of Prey has been discontinued in favor of the author’s other projects.

[Original Review] I first approached the League of Prey with interest, because the concept was if not original than at least a new enough take to catch my eye. Yet I found my interest waning when the main character is introduced. I found that not only could I not identify with her, I actually didn’t like her. She’s not sarcastic, she’s just cynical and disrespectful with little reason. She’s obviously intelligent, but lacks the willpower to explore on her own and as a result, her character is apathetic and bored. I found her friends to be sympathetic and compelling, though, so I kept reading, hopeful that they would be a good influence on her.

When the main plot begins, however, I expected her to get more interested and thereby more interesting. What happened instead was she got manipulative and whiny, manipulating her own friends into immoral behavior and becoming sullen and petulant when they don’t want to comply. When I expected her to gain some independance from the people she claimed to not care about at all, she became suddenly clingy and desperate for their attention. She’s a well-written character if this was the intent, but I don’t like her, and frankly I can’t see why her friends stick around.

There’s a lot of room for development because of this, though. My advice for the author, don’t have her take her friends sometimes. Do it solo- the team isn’t necessisary and has actually been a liability. Let the experience change her, give her strength, not make her weaker. Let her find her element and start to gain some willpower to stand up to others and let her friends see this. This will gain them respect for her and give them a reason to stay around her. Then have them find out, and bring the house of cards crashing down around her. I would read that. What you have now is an apathetic cynic bullying and bribing her "friends" into stealing for her. Honestly, right now, the main character is the antagonist, I my mind. Her friends are the characters I really care about.

I don’t know if I would recommend reading this one until the author works out some of the kinks, but if you want to read it and see what you think, please do. It’s a good start, but it still has places it needs to go.

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