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ACTIVATED

Editor’s First Impression

By Chris Poirier, editor

Aug 23, 2011: Gives too much focus to "gee, cool" elements of the world’s magic system ("programming", done by "programmers") and physical descriptions of characters, and not enough focus to character development. Not a story that will transcend its "young adult" tag.

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CHILDREN OF THE APOCALYPSE

Keeping me reading

By C J Edwards, member

Jun 1, 2010: So far this story seems to be aimed at a younger audience that what I fall into, but after reading the first chapter I have to say I want to read the second. I need to know why Genevieve is being followed. Aside from a few very minor things the writing is very solid and like I said, I will be reading more because I need to know what happens next. As long as I need to know what happens next I will keep reading.

Some of the teacher student interaction seemed a bit much in the first chapter. Are teachers really that mean? I know it has been a while since I was in highschool but if a teacher treated my child that way we would have words. Also some of the dialogue between Gen and her friends was a little confusing and hard to follow. Sometimes dialogue would appear without any indication as to who is speaking. This can pull you out of the story a little bit, but it is a minor issue and easily fixed.

I will be interested to see how the next couple of chapters come togeather.

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CHILDREN OF THE APOCALYPSE

Great Story!

By Jaws415, member

Sep 22, 2009: Children of the Apocalypse is a great read so far, it is in short a pre-apocalypse story. The story follows 3 special girls with powers and one bastard of a mentor whose job it is to save the world. The “bad guys” are mysterious and varied and not everything is what it seems.

What I like about it: The story progresses smoothly without the perspective confusion that you find in stories that follow more then one main character. The characters develop nicely and the author stays true to the characters’ characteristics, there is never a question as to why a character did what they did. The overall plot is engaging with enough sub-plots and twists that keep the story interesting. The story never seems drawn out and stale, it always feels fresh. The character’s may have special powers however the story revolves more around the characters themselves and how they interact then their wham-bam powers (wham-bam is a technical term  ). The chapter length is nice and long, no tid-bits here and there.

What I don’t care for: I would love to see this updated more frequently then once a month, but understand that, that is probably not feasible with the chapter length and the author’s other work (Curio Killed the Cat). The new 50 point system, a user must register and acquire 50 points (from commenting, donating, reviewing etc.) in order to read new chapters (old chapters are available for free until Part III Chap 8) while I can understand where the author is coming from and some of the problems they encountered, I would like to see a better way of doing this, maybe some type of yearly subscription service.

If you are looking for an engaging web-serial check this out or the author’s other works, the complete list can be found here: http://www.skyladawncameron.com/books.

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