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HOW TO AVOID DEATH ON A DAILY BASIS

rough start that got better

By sunflowerofice, author of Technically Abroad

Jan 1, 2020: Alright so here is my short term non spoilery review. It starts out a bit rough in my mind and it really felt rushed. It got better as far as i have read (which is just in book three) and i think it will do so based on the betterment I saw. Also the character isn’t hero mcheroson which I like. Or noble mchonorton.

now on for the longer one.

The series starts out a bit rough and rushed. In fact it feels fairly rushed for a while in a way. Based on the premise I won’t say it needs to be super long and drawn out, but it still feels pretty quick that things ended up how they did and how easily everyone adjusted to what happened, especially with the main character.

Another thing is, while i didn’t count it, I would be surprised if any of the chapters in book one had more than 1000 words. Book two only a few maybe. I know you don’t need every chapter to be like 10,000 words, but still. Maybe it’s just me but when every chapter is so short it feels like how I talked about dbz with friends once. You only need to watch one out of three episodes because you get last time and next time on dbz then you watch the one episode.

On the plus side the main character is more real. Flawed and more than a little bit of a jerk who is arrogant and looks down on people.

I also like how some of the stuff is done like how the mc tells the girls they should learn to protect themselves because we can’t know what people might do in a world where killing is more casual, even if it’s monsters they are targeting.

I will say though for how on the ball that he seems at times he isn’t very curious. Sure he has some social anxiety, but a few questions like maybe what are the laws of the land would have been nice to see him think about.

So while I wont say it is one I will rank as top tier I have easily seen worse and since it got better already I have hopes it sill keep doing so.

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HOW TO AVOID DEATH ON A DAILY BASIS

Funny And Insightful

By robertotest26, member

Feb 16, 2019: Is you are a racional individual and open minded i believe you can enjoy the story. Don’t take it too seriously just enjoy the good stuff and tolerate the bad (there are moments in the story that are subpar but there are few in my opinion). The MC is a cynical prick, His way of expresing his ideas to both readers and characters is with a variation of sarcams, pessimism and self deprecation but even then you would enjoy his take on the world both because there are very funny (plenty of times his internal monologues are hilarious but not all) and insightful (if you reflect on the core idea of what he says you would find that is a very valid argument, again not every time). Anyway is a pretty good read, it is not a exeptional novel but i don’t think that the author had that kind of goal. Enjoy and Think.

I have just read the other reviews now so i’m adding this paragraph. The best one that i think that the person actually read most of the whole thing is "the cynic’s progress". It really describe the story well.

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EXISTENTIAL TERROR AND BREAKFAST

Extra Dark Roast

By Shaeor, author of Chosen Shackles

Jun 18, 2018: This review was done as part of a swap.

The first thing I would say is that Existential Terror and Breakfast is a strong departure from the YA tropes that generally pervade web fiction.

Malcolm Steadman is absolutely front and center of a small cast, here. Punctuations are counted down over the course of the story to add ambient pressure and a sense of direction. But this story may lack the urgency of typical heroic plots, you may guess. I think things pick up around chapter nine when Malcolm first tastes false hope and motivation, and they really find their footing in the last sequence. Editing needs are dismissable, I can imagine no better way to structure or pace, and the end is very fitting. If you can get into them, the repeating structure of the chapters can be engrossing.

SPOILER! It’s a tragedy. I almost wish this had been stated outright.

Malcolm Steadman’s tragedy brings good to the world, however. Throughout the story, he is inadvertently benefitting people by his struggle and is perhaps transcended by this. But it’d be easy to say he lacks redemption. I considered whether the catharsis of a proper tragedy is found here, and I believe it is.

The ending follows logically from the main theme of the story, which is a sort of illustration of what philosophy can do to a person. There is sometimes an undercurrent of real contempt in the writing, I think, which is slightly indulgent. With definite themes of capitalism’s oppressive nature, social expectation, and repression, there is a good bit to chew on in Existential Terror and Breakfast.

That will be my last point. This story requires reflection to be truly great, in my opinion. I enjoyed the read, but it was not always easy to. I would not have written this book, personally, and I would disagree with the Author on some of its implications. But it is a genuine and artistically sound work. I give it the Mystical five on that basis alone. Respect.

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