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The Academy by Kitt Moss

If we don't escape, we'll die... 

Lynch is a prisoner, kept in a the nightmarish lab they call “The Academy”. She and he fellow inmates are subject to terrible experiments. Lynch thinks only of escape. Then, one day, an opportunity presents itself . . . 

Editor’s note: The story is still online, but is no longer free to read (you must buy the book after the third chapter). As a result, we’ve archived the listing. If you want to read it anyway, you can find it here.


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Listed: Mar 3, 2012

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By Fiona Gregory, editor

Mar 24, 2012: The stuff of nightmares, mine at least – running from the bad guys. This one reads more like a Young Adult novel than Kit Moss’s other work, After – simpler language and a fast paced plot.

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Not All Bad

By illlogicmedia, member

Nov 18, 2013: Probably the most irritating thing I can find when reading a book is glaring contradictions or inconsistancies within the story. I don’t mean to come off too harsh here, but "The Academy" could be so much more. One example is between two consecutive chapters.

Example:

Part One, Chapter Three – "It wasn’t always like this. Not long ago—two or three months, I think, though it’s hard to be sure of time in a place like this—I was just an ordinary kid. Seventeen at last count, living with my parents in a house in the city."

Part One, Chapter Four – " I watch myself in the one-way mirror on the opposite wall: a skinny, pale-looking sixteen year old girl, head shaved and blue eyes rimmed with sleepless red."

These "chapters" aren’t even very long (500 words +/-), so I am having a really hard time wrapping my head around a one year difference in age when only one evening has passed.

The story itself is intriguing enough that I read the first 10 chapters. So far, the characters are slowly getting built, which, I don’t mind that. It allows the author to provide more depth as the story goes so that the reader can learn to identify with them. The action is super fast as the author gets right down to the nitty gritty. The word choice and build gives this book the inferrence that it is meant for younger readers.

I’m a stickler for punctuation and correct grammar. I know many of these online web serials do not have a professional Editor. This story in particular appears to be written from a British author (references to "mum" instead of "mom") to which I can be a bit more lax about. It is more of a pet peeve of mine and I get pretty upset with myself when I make those same types of mistakes. Regardless, I recommend each author to at least find a friend (even someone majoring in writing or English) to give it a once over to catch any glaring mistakes.

A suggestion to this author would be to differentiate, for the audience, when a character is giving internalized dialog (or thoughts). I’ve seen others utilize italicised font type for that and I think it is a great way to clarify what is going on. Otherwise it looks like a character may have said something and the author forgot the grammar.

I would also recommend a better navigation for the chapters. There is a lot of scrolling one needs to do to get between them.

The only other negative I can see is that you have to purchase the book for $0.99 from Smashwords in order to be able to finish it. It is for this reason I personally wouldn’t recommend it.

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