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Against the Current by Emmel

 

In a world full of dangers . . .  In a forest grown men fear to tread after nightfall . . .  Running away from home in the middle of night might not be the most reasonable thing to do. Reason, however, has never been a strength of eight year old Laiva. She feels wronged, she feels humiliated, she feels like the whole world is against her. Except Mynor, that is . . . 


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Listed: Jul 25, 2008

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Indifferent

By Sonja Nitschke, editor

Aug 15, 2008: When I review, I don’t like to critique the work while I’m at it. So, I’m just going to say this:

Against the Current does not allow me to suspend my disbelief.

I am faced with incredible circumstances, with deus ex machina resolutions.

The plot is illogical. The motives of the protagonist are unknown and I am left wondering why she went on this fool journey, why she doesn’t want to be laughed at for being scared of a forest which is, beyond shadow of a doubt, dangerous, and, most importantly, why I should care about her.

The crafting of the world is sketchy at best. Why does an innkeeper’s daughter have the ability to fight off a pack of werewolves? How does magic work?

Ultimately, the only thing I found in this story were plot devices.

The writing itself could use work, though it’s not completely unreadable. There are several grammar issues, misspelled words, and things of that nature.

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