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Cross Product by Matthew Skala

 

The Mountain is covered with trees.  For whatever reason, the loggers never got around to chopping them down before the hippies got the government to declare the whole works a park.  There was something said about special spiritual significance of the old-growth forest on the Mountain, but I didn’t pay it any mind; the hippies will say anything they think they can get away with.  But what if just one time in a thousand, they’re actually right?


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Listed: Mar 23, 2009

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Editor: Jim Zoetewey
September 9, 2009

I read eight chapters and couldn’t really get into it.

It could use some editing, specifically not putting entire conversations into a single paragraph, and fleshing out the characters. One noticeable problem is that many chapters tend to mostly be the main character’s observations about what’s wrong with the world.

It would be more readable with a more direct plot and occasional observations.

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