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Awkward Execution Meets Interesting Premise

By Carcharocles, author of The Revelation

Aug 11, 2017: Two disclosures: Most of this review focuses on the chapter Demon Night, as well as the first entry into Dinner and a Movie. This won’t be indicative of the serial as a whole. This review was done as part of a review exchange.

Don’t Feed the Dark describes itself as an apocalyptic zombie series, but that’s a bit misleading. The zombies in the story are a rather unique take on the genre, being halfway between simple undead and mutant creature; it’s a fresh take on the genre, but could use some work, at least in the early chapters.

The biggest problem with the story is that the author focuses too much on the details. He’ll spend an entire paragraph describing an individual zombie in such a way that breaks the flow of the story. Although he improves quite a bit in the first five entries, he doesn’t seem to have formed a balance between narrative and description—it’s mostly tell rather than show. He can also be rather wordy at times, forming sentences that seem overly long and clumsy. He improves rather quickly in this regard, but it can be hard to look past these flaws.

The story itself seems interesting. It begins with a serial killer—an unlikeable character with some rather stereotypical "symptoms," breaking into a house to take a life, only to find himself fighting for his own and that of his intended victim’s—if only temporarily on her part. This can be off-putting to readers who would prefer their heroes have at least something about them they can root for, but it fits the setting well. After all, what zombie movie doesn’t have that one psychopathic character wreaking havoc on the dead and living alike? However, the story shifts away from him and his "victim" after only four entries, moving on to a different character and setting entirely. While this would not necessarily be a bad thing, the two chapters don’t have much in common, and the rather sexual nature of the second chapter’s first entry stands in stark contrast to the graphic events that preceded it.

It’s not that this is a bad thing—it just won’t suit everyone’s tastes. Fans of B horror flicks will likely love this serial, especially since that fifth entry lacks many of the pitfalls of the first chapter. However, it won’t attract many readers outside of its rather narrow base—fans of the Romero movies will likely find it cheap. Instead, this story will likely appeal mainly to the fans of 80’s exploitation flicks and low-budget zombie films. I recommend it for those fans, although there’s no reason for other horror fans to avoid it.

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