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God Cursed by Katsueki


It started with a girl at a masquerade. She beckoned me with her fan. Then she screamed, because she saw my fangs.

My sire, Alexis, saved me from the Hunters. I rather wished he hadn’t. Better to be felled by the god Le Chasseur’s loyal Hunters than to live as a vampire. Nothing will make me believe different. Not even Adrian’s Blessed Child. At least, that’s what I thought.

Note: God Cursed contains some graphic sexual content and graphic violence.

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Listed: Nov 1, 2013


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Editor’s First Impression

By Palladian, editor, author of Super

Apr 20, 2014: To begin with, there are a number of things to like about God Cursed. The author has created a fully realized world, full of vampires and cat-people, as well as regular humans. The story is drawn in a gothic/regency setting, which is lovingly described. Explanations for the existence of each race of people is tied into the mythology of the world, and comes through in pieces of fascinating stories as the characters discuss the world around them. In general, I found the writing itself of good quality and edited with a minimum of typos.

The major problem I had with the story eventually sucked away all my enjoyment for it, however, so that I couldn’t read any further than the twelfth chapter. The protagonist, Seraphin, begins by letting the reader know that he’s been inducted into vampirism by force at the hand of Alexis, a much older vampire. At first, I felt sympathy for him about his situation, especially since he seems to have been raised in a religion that is devoutly against vampires, but as the story went on and on and Seraphin did nothing to change his situation, simply going along with everything Alexis does (including killing people) with only snarky replies to show his disapproval, I became weary of hearing about it. In short, the protagonist is that complaining friend you don’t take calls from anymore. You know, the one who whines endlessly about their job/life/significant other/etc. You felt sympathy for them at first, and tried to make helpful suggestions, but eventually, after hearing the same complaints again and again and because they made no attempt to change their situation, you started avoiding them. In Seraphin’s case, there are a number of opportunities that come along during the story that could enable him to break away from Alexis and make a new start, but he doesn’t take any of them. This, and the fact that he’s a grown man and could simply walk away from the other guy at any given time, made me tire of this story quickly.

In order to build this story in such a way that a reader continues to have sympathy for this character, I’d recommend the author show the audience that he’s actually trapped in his situation, rather than just have Seraphin assure us that he is. For example, show us that when he tries to leave he gets sick, or when he wakes up after running he ends up back with Alexis regardless of where he’d gotten to, or something. Also, in order to keep the story interesting to a reader, Seraphin needs to grow or change. I’m assuming the author is going somewhere, but I recommend getting there sooner, before you exhaust your readers’ good will. By the dozenth chapter, I thought it was well past time for your protagonist to make a decision, which as you’ve set things up seems to be that he either gets out by any means (up to and including death), or he accepts his situation and decides to become what he reluctantly finds himself as.

At any rate, for those of you out there who are big fans of vampires, cat-boys, or male/male romance, you may want to check this out, especially if you have a lot of patience for endless mental complaints.

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