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God Vessel Online by DarkClaymore

 

Erika is a tall, elegant honor student and a closet gamer who is secretly obsessed with cute little critters. Mina is a short, brash girl who flaunts herself as a gamer and pays no heed to others.

Normally, the two would have nothing to do with each other. But, when the virtual “Grim Reaper’s Curse” afflicts Mina in the real world – everything goes to hell.

The two girls form an unlikely pair as they dive into the harsh virtual reality of God Vessel Online. There, the insane characters, incurable curses and vicious flowers are just the beginning of their fun virtual experience that will gradually bleed into their real lives.

Note: God Vessel Online is unfinished, and will likely remain so.  It contains some harsh language.


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Listed: Nov 29, 2016

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My…this was quite charming

By Fiona Gregory, editor

Mar 22, 2017: I’m not a particular fan of RPG stories..so when I took a look at this one, I admit it was to see just how bad it was. I expected immature writing and cliches galore . . . what I found was an amusing and charming story that sucked me in and kept me coming back for more.

The fun part for me is the two main characters; the sensitive, thoughtful Erika with her polite "My..I see" phrases contrasted with the cheerfully vulgar and impulsive Mina whose view of life is simple – a constant indulgence in virtual knock-em-down fights. I also enjoyed the writing style, which I would describe as droll. There were some typos, but the words seemed well chosen. The girls’ (mainly Erika’s) adventures in the VR world were done well; you didn’t forget it was a game, because all the accoutrements and atmosphere of a game are present, but it felt like things were "really" happening as well.

I’m a little disappointed not to find out more about some of the mysteries of both the real and virtual worlds depicted in this story, as the author decided to cut it short and end the serial early. Unless he decides to continue later, what we have feels like the first arc completed – which does kind of work plot-wise as a significant challenge has been overcome and we can imagine how the rest will turn out. I’d still like to read it, though.

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