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Heart of Hauden by P.A. Seasholtz

Book One in the Harmony of the Othar Saga 

Desperate and dying, with their society plunged into chaos at the hands of the Plague Bringers, Laedian Fayersae has led her people to Hauden on the winds of a misunderstood foretelling. Silent and fading, with their ancient fires extinguished at the hands of the Dasyu, whispers by the Ganien Mothers on Hauden keep the memory of a forgotten prophecy from going dark. Thus, the accidental convergence of foretelling and prophecy begins the Harmony of the Othar Saga.


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Listed: Jun 30, 2010

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Editor’s First Impression

By Linda Schoales, editor

Jun 29, 2010: The story starts with a city, if not a civilization, falling. The leader is dying and his heir must flee the city. There’s definite tension building already but the number of names being thrown around may make things hard to follow at first.

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For Fantasy Fans

By G.S. Williams, author of The Surprising Life and Death of Diggory Franklin

Jun 30, 2010: Fantasy stories can be epic. Virtually anything is possible since authors aren’t confined by the laws of physics as we know them, so you can have magic wizards, huge beasts, talking mirrors, or wicked witches.

The scope of fantasy in literature is almost as ambitious as the imaginative possibilities. J.R.R. Tolkien created entire languages and histories as a backdrop for the Lord of the Rings, and barely scratched the surface of the world in his mind. C.S. Lewis created a world of his own, too, but used it to create rich allegories based on Biblical stories, linking his lion Aslan with Christ. DragonLance and Forbidden Realms stories had various authors playing in vast, comprehensive worlds.

As a reader, I can appreciate creative imaginations. As a student of literature, I appreciate structure and elegance in prose. "Heart of Hauden" has evidence of creativity, as the author seems to have put a lot of thought into the history, languages and cultures of his story.

However, there’s something lacking, that almost indefinable "oomph" that makes a story gripping. The narrative shifts between first person and third, following a particular character and then an omniscient position. I find the shifts unnecessary, as both are a little dry and impersonal, the historical tone making it hard to care for characters, or even to get a sense of action and urgency.

I think the story needs an emotional focus, something to make me care about what happens next. I don’t know if making the narrative all from one voice would help, but it would seem less arbitrary and unnecessary.

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