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Kakomareta by Angela Li

 

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A fantasy world explored through the eyes of both its normal, and less than normal inhabitants.  Kakomareta follows the stories of great people before they were great, and mediocre people who were brilliant for a brief moment.  The current arcs follow Yue, a gypsy who’s lived most of her life in a wasteland, and Ha, a young student and noble living, and failing spectacularly, in the palace of the Eternal City.  Though currently set in an somewhat Asian-themed country, as the world expands, other cultures will be included.


A partial series, with no recent updates

Note: Kakomareta is unfinished, with no recent updates.  It contains some graphic sexual content, graphic violence, and harsh language.

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Listed: Dec 12, 2008

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Editor: Gavin Williams
December 13, 2008

The story of Kakomareta is told from two perspectives, the character Yue and the character Ha.  I find Yue’s story particularly well-written, as she has a dreamy, skewed-perspective on the world.  She seems able to see the past and ghosts, and copes with the loss of her mother.  Her blind brother uses the Go board to do magic.  My one complaint is that the existing chapters are too short to really create an engaging experience just yet, because just as I’m getting into her narrative, Ha’s chapter starts. 

Ha’s chapters are less impressive.  The first one is rambling and disjointed.  The best way I can describe the experience is by analogy:  it reads like a movie someone filmed entirely on a hand-held camera while running.  You get bounced around before you can really absorb any meaning, or reflect on what you’ve read.  Maybe it would work for someone with an attention deficit disorder, but I like to actually focus on what I’m reading.  However, further chapters featuring Ha improve tremendously, though I still don’t find him as interesting as Yue.

All in all, I’d wait to see if the author can transform the dreamy promise of Yue’s narrative style into something more poetic, but we’ll have to wait and see what this develops into.  Hopefully, a few weeks or months down the road, I’ll be able to update this and let you know it’s improved into a four or five star story.

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