I really wanted to like Moondust based on the description:  fairies, magic, and dragons, oh my.  Unfortunately, I wasn’t able to enjoy Moondust, and found it rather difficult to read because of the consistently bad grammar. 

Even if I ignored the bad grammar, I had a difficult time becoming interested in the story itself.  After the first five chapters, the plot is only slowly moving forward without anything real or tangible to drive it.  According to the narrative, the main character is a Sidhe, but she didn’t feel like one of the fey folk.  When I read the story, I didn’t feel a sense of magic or Other Worldlyness that lured me to read more and more. 

Conflicts are used to drive plots forward, but the first confrontation felt so contrived that it failed to draw my interest as a reader.  The author tends to "tell" instead of "show" the emotions and events that occurred in the story which serves to create a flimsy protagonist, prose that is uninspired, and a stalling plot.  I found it difficult to suspend my disbelief and throw myself into the story and the world the author created.  Instead of being drawn into the story, I simply read words on the page. 

I believe that this story has a lot of potential, but the writing itself needs work.

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