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Reaper by Taulsn

Don't mess with Death, he doesn't like it. 

Don’t deal with demons, don’t kill with magic, don’t bring back the dead. There are three simple rules that every magic user knows and abides.

Powerful families enforce the rules, and the only sentence is death. When a novice mage is offered immortality in exchange for breaking them; he jumps at the chance.

Now he must navigate a world of politics, monsters, and dark gods with only his familiar to guide him. But she has plans of her own.

Note: Reaper is unfinished, with no recent updates.  It contains some graphic violence and harsh language.


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Listed: Mar 3, 2016

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The Killer Healer and his Grim Reaper

By Shaeor, author of Dirge

May 12, 2016: What it has:

Reaper, as an urban modern-supernatural story, is pretty good. The magic is intriguing, and the information all hints to a bigger world. The worldbuilding itself seems skillful, but not particularly like the child of long contemplation. That’s not to say, though, that everything isn’t fleshed out. There is fairly strong logical consistency, here.

I enjoyed the character interactions and even got a grin or two out of them. With eleven chapters as of this review, at 2k words average, I’m pretty confident the story is going somewhere. We’ve gotten a good dose of backstory for one of the two main characters, and they are both interesting. I do believe that the author will take the solid structural start they have and make something of it. The clans, characters, and exposition are all fittingly unique and enticing. Some influences may come from ‘Pact’, in the magic department, which is creatively handled.

What it needs:

Reaper needs a more focused hand. Sentences are missing punctuation, gaining undeleted words, and lacking coherency. Rereads are necessary almost once a chapter or more when things are confusing. You get the sense that the author has not sufficiently scrutinized their work. Though they seem to be having fun, their writing is unprofessional. Needs editing. Corvid is an excellent character, but with the flyby style of narrative and rapid pace, it’s hard to connect. I really think the author would benefit from slowing down, and adding more immersive details. At least some editing.

Verdict:

For fans of the genre and those who aren’t bothered by the issues mentioned, give it a go. You’ll probably enjoy yourself.

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