Aug 14, 2011: This right here, in the sentence I am using, is called "present tense" and it describes what I am doing exactly now. I am typing and reading the words that I write, and thinking about what I’m going to say next. It is all happening now.
In the sentence you just read, you were reading the "present tense" but that was in the past. The sentence that I wrote here was in the "past tense" because the events it described took place in the past, like when I went to school or when you crawled in diapers.
By the time you finish reading this, you will have read my entire review and you will have formed opinions about it, and this third paragraph will have contained examples of the "future tense," sentences predicting future events, like you will probably be annoyed with what’s obvious so far.
Well, in the first few chapters of "Second String heroes" it starts with present tense, and then it gets confused with past tense. MOST stories (but not all) tell events in past tense, because they relate what happened. SOME stories (but not many) tell stories in present tense to create a sense of immediacy and tension, though it’s hard to do really well. THIS story does both at odd times without consistency, disrupting the flow of things.
Not to mention, like, having teenagers say things like "like" a lot while talking about homework and fighting crime, and any numbers not being written out like one, two, three, like standard texts, but 2 and 3 and 4 which is not the professional standard.
There’s probably an actual story in there about mediocre heroes, but until the grammar sorts itself out with a decent edit, it’s a mediocre example in a field that has many other notable titles that don’t require you to stop and reassess what you’re reading every few paragraphs.
So until that editing process happens, let’s find other things to read, shall we?
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