Just by chance, I happened to come across "Shattered Remnants of a Dream" by casually browsing the recently vetted.

Then, I read the first sentence:

"Vance Dancougar decided then and there that diving behind a glass case during a drive-by wasn’t the smartest thing he had ever done."

My eyebrow rose, and I continued reading the first three chapters in one sitting. If you knew how fidgety I was, you’d understand this to be a rather big deal. The Author managed to suck me in with some of the most vivid descriptions I’ve ever read.

The story thrusts you right into action, where the MC, Vance, barely survives a drive-by shooting. Simultaneously, a girl is being chased by an enemy with an interesting weapon. The Author uses POV shifts between the two in mid-sentences, emphasizing their similar momentary situations, all the while creating something almost poetic in nature.

I’m now eleven chapters in, and I must say that I’m sincerely impressed. The Author clearly demonstrates his unique talent in this work.

The only thing I dare say constructively is that I wish there was more descriptiveness behind Vance’s thoughts, rather than just sarcastic one-liners when something new or uncomfortable happens. However, I’m only on chapter eleven, so this could improve later on in the story.

Overall, this is one of the best things I’ve read for a while. Definitely do not pass this story up.

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