Jan 16, 2010: The first chapter is well-written, if a bit sad. It’s about a "family" of street kids trying to survive. At 12, Joshua is the oldest and has taken on the responsibility for 5 or 6 younger kids.

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Jan 25, 2010: As we read at the end of chapter twelve, ‘you’re in for a treat.’

First the negative. This isn’t the best written story I have ever read. The writing is choppy, and rough. The author begins with a couple of embedded flashbacks that make for difficult reading.

No, the jewel of this story is . . . the story. We only have up to chapter twelve, so the story is just being born, but it looks promising. And unique. I have a weak spot for imaginative plots, and this is one. A group of orphans, a new kind of magic . . . and food. Food is good. I mean the current chapter has our hero cooking up a stew out of ingredients he finds in an alley.

I would like to clear up a couple of plot holes, a few rough spots. And I wish he had a little better grasp of language. But I am really looking forward to the next bits of the story.

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