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Not Sure What’s Going On

By JPV1000, author of Warbler

Nov 12, 2015: So basically, there’s no direction or plot to this. It advertises itself as ‘Dark Fantasy’, but the only dark parts of it are the facts that these characters are enslaving a goblin, and a bad rape joke. I’m not even sure who I’m supposed to be rooting for here . . . The characters can’t really be distinguished, and while the writing’s pleasant enough to follow I suppose, there’s no purpose to it. It starts with a drake attacking a village, which it can destroy as it is a ‘Crystal Host’, yet we never have any explanation as to what that is. (Presumably something that hosts a crystal, probably a magical one?) We then move to a goblin getting enslaved by some people who then spend six chapters wandering a forest. I’ve actually lost track of how many people there are (I think two?) and rereading bits hasn’t actually helped clear up my confusion. Like I said, the writing is pleasant enough to read, but there’s a few formatting and typographical errors—enough that it subtracts from what immersion this story has to offer.

Full Disclosure: This was done as part of a review swap. I have endeavored to maintain as neutral a point of view as possible.

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