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Trilobite Park by BGHilton

The South Hertling Chronicles 3 

The Australian suburb of South Hertling has known its share of misfortunes—supervillain attacks, unexpected time rifts, attempted robot uprisings and crashed spaceships, to name but a few.

But finally the suburb has some good news!

It is opening day of a new attraction in which for the first time ever, the public can see extinct creatures in captivity—Trilobite Park! Excitement is in the air as new staff, visitors, reporters and local school students have all come to see some semi-fascinating trilobites do whatever it is that they do, exactly.

Now granted, the place was built on the ruins of a magical pyramid. Granted, the construction was a little hasty. Sure, the scientist in charge is a little . . . off. And sure, the emergency systems were mostly scavenged from a decommissioned Soviet submarine. But hey, why worry about that? I mean, seriously, how dangerous can trilobites be?

Trilobite Park is Part Three in the South Hertling Chronicles series. It is not necessary to have read Parts One or Two to understand it. Just take it as read that a bunch of weird stuff happened, and now there are trilobites.

Note: Trilobite Park contains some graphic violence and harsh language.

A serialized novel, updating weekly

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Listed: Jan 8, 2019


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Yar, here be comedy more riveting than the titular creatures!

By Joker, author of Mavericks

Jan 31, 2019: The first thing I should note about Trilobite Park is the formatting. It’s not the easiest read due to the navigation of the site being a little wonky, and there are enough grammar errors that BGHilton should go back and proofread.

The story itself has a very esoteric idea behind it but the writing is very simple and streamlined. Descriptions are crisp and give us just the right amount of information. Infodumps are non-existent, with Hilton expecting you to have read the prior two stories to understand some of the sillier aspects of the world. His blurb about this not being necessary, though, is accurate. Just buy into the absurdity of the setting and you’re good.

What stood out most to be is Hilton’s masterful understanding of comedic timing. He’s constantly lobbing out balls only to hit home runs a few lines later. The best comparison I can think of is Futurama, darkly satirical but not spiteful about it. Characters are exaggerated but not mean or unlikable.

There’s not much to say about the plot so far. It’s nothing outstanding and doesn’t really make any commentary. It just exists to further the punchlines, at least so far, and that’s fine. This is a light story in both theme and content.

The characters are all interesting enough and the dialogue is fantastic, but the narrative voice is too similar. I think this is because we don’t get enough time with any particular character for one to develop, which is unfortunate.

I’d recommend this to anyone who wants a quick laugh and will put up with the formatting.

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