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Unforeseen Dives by Aheila

A Psychic Service of Investigation blog novel 

Psychic Service of Investigation Agent Cassidy Parker dives toward potential futures to uncover crimes and prevent them. With her telepathic partner Rebecca, she stumbles upon a threat of massive proportions. Stopping it does not only involve investigating the situation but also a little arm-wrestling with PSI’s parent agency – the FBI – and a careful management of reader (telepaths and psychics) and non-reader relationships. What Cassidy hasn’t yet foreseen is that putting a bomber behind bars is barely the beginning.

Note: Unforeseen Dives contains some graphic violence.


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Listed: Oct 19, 2010

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By Tom Barendse, member

Nov 7, 2010: Honest, believable fiction. The author is able to communicate an idea well, with a pleasing economy of words; the work is in plain English and does not try to find a thesaurus alternative for every fourth word. The pace moves along smoothly but without rushing, partly thanks to the choice of the first-person perspective for the protagonist.

My only criticism so far is the prologue. While the atmosphere is very good and the writing almost poetic, the use of a second-person narrative is quite jarring—especially when it begins to describe the reader, as though the character is talking directly to the reader, at which point it becomes almost uncomfortable. Further, the prologue doesn’t appear to set up any sort of plot devices, other than to tell us that the story is about some kind of serial killer who lives in some kind of building in some place where there is snow on the ground.

Like most prologues, it seems to be intended as an extra morsel at the beginning that adds a little something to the experience, but isn’t vital to the plot. Most prologues can be skipped, and this one is no exception.

However, I encourage new readers to read the prologue anyway, but to understand that it does get much better in the first chapter.

Overall, this is a neat and tidy piece written by an author who knows her personal style inside-out but isn’t afraid to experiment.

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