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Uninvoked by Andrea M. Bodel

 

Amy is carving a name for herself as a world class snoop. Want dirt on the governor’s daughter? Amy’s got it covered. Information on the Duke’s enemies? Fees apply. Facts on the Stronghold Assassins? Well, no. You’ll have to hire a hero for that.

Unfortunately, investigating the Stronghold is exactly what the handsome Invoker Bernard wants her to do. Amy has very little choice but to accept his case, but there’s evidence that Bernard may mean more harm than good to Eberhard. Can Amy figure out the truth before it’s too late, or will she be destroyed by these two new powerful enemies? Find out by reading Uninvoked.


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Listed: Mar 23, 2009

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Living Without Magic in a World Where It’s Common

By Jim Zoetewey, editor, author of The Legion of Nothing

Sep 27, 2009: On the whole, Uninvoked works well.

The story revolves around a person with no magic abilities in a world where many people, possibly most, can do some kind of magic.

Uninvoked feels like it’s still near the beginning of the story as I write this, despite having fourteen updates to its credit.

During those fourteen updates, the writer does a good job setting up the basic situation. Amy, the main character deals in information. Bernard, an Invoker (which I’m assuming means trained wizard, but could be wrong), wants information from her, but not the sort that’s easy for her to find. Schreber, some sort of underworld figure, wants her to stay away from Bernard.

By the time you’ve reached the end of what’s up, you’ve got a good picture of the situation, plus some interesting hints about character relationships and the world they live in.

The straight ahead quality of the storytelling fits the young adult audience and isn’t a bad thing for the adults reading it either.

There are a few things that I should mention the author might want to look at.

The website: The chapters are divided into two categories, 1-10 and 11-20. What this means is that if you hit 10, there’s no obvious link to 11 and you have to go click on the menu at the top of the screen. It’s not a terrible thing, but it does pull you out of the story.

Names and Concepts: Generally it’s good to let the reader absorb what something means from context. Personally, I often didn’t have the information in context to figure out what words like indel, indelfy, ‘fy or Invoker meant. Sometimes the information I did need was a few chapters back. Names with a more intuitive connection to the concept behind them might have helped. I don’t know. I just know that they sometimes pulled me out of the story.

These criticisms aside, Uninvoked is a story that’s well put together so far.

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