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Yeoman by Nikhil Cheerla

The sickle is mightier than the sword. 

Neil Palleti is a low-wage McDonald’s worker in the inner city of Detroit. One day, he receives a strange package in the mail — a package containing a single soybean seed.

Palleti’s father was a farmer, and his father’s father was a farmer too. He knows what needs to be done.

“Yeoman – A Web Serial” follows Neil’s path as he takes territorial control of more than half of the city with a vice-grip on the entire underworld. Palleti becomes a crime lord known to his followers simply as “Yeoman”. But, despite his cruelty, he improves his territory. Drugs are no more. Crime is at an all-time low. And the fields keep on growing, as the Yeoman and his followers burn down abandoned, crumbling apartments, blast away fast-food chains, and plant crops.

Note: Yeoman contains some graphic violence and harsh language.


A serialized novel, updating twice weekly

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Listed: Oct 30, 2016

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Preachy power fantasy dressed in pseudoscience

By Alexander.Hollins, member

Nov 4, 2016: Let me start with one thing. Bad science makes me flail. Were I not reading new stories on WFG SPECIFICALLY to review, I would have stopped with the first page. But, I was willing to move past it. The story has a conceit in the prologue that the world has gone to hell, and a dying old woman decides to write a story about how things could have been better, so, why not. That conceit alone forgives a lot of the sins of the story, the very obvious self insert power fantasy of it. But bad science abounds, the story comes across very preachy against GMOs and other technology, using untrue myths about them. The plot contains a lot of really shitty tropes. A crime ridden city where gangsters and drug dealers walk around robbing and selling, no police to stop them, and yet ordinary citizens work at mcdonalds and go about their day, just making sure to be inside at night, when the gangs roam. . . . 

The actual quality of the prose isn’t bad. The story flows, characters have a bit of uniqueness in their voices. Sadly, what could be good writing is wasted on a less than mediocre story. Skip it.

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