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By Lion, member

Apr 9, 2018: Interesting premise, but the execution was poor. From what I understand the story began from r/writingprompts and while the author took the idea in an interesting direction he didn’t give it the detail to be interesting. The abilities are given more explanation than description, and action scenes follow a similar path. There’s more interest in telling the reader about all of these cool things instead of showing them. It doesn’t help that the main characters voice is grating. Which brings up my main issue with the story. The characters are boring and two dimensional. Women are a little more than sex objects and men who aren’t the main character are missing a few brain cells. Also every other character introduced has a weird verbal tick that comes at the end of their sentence or in italics so you really know it’s special.

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