I read eight chapters and couldn’t really get into it.

It could use some editing, specifically not putting entire conversations into a single paragraph, and fleshing out the characters. One noticeable problem is that many chapters tend to mostly be the main character’s observations about what’s wrong with the world.

It would be more readable with a more direct plot and occasional observations.

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