Evangeline’s Ride is probably very fun to write, but unfortunately, it isn’t fun to read. The story of a young songstress getting an amazing record deal, meeting lots of cool people, and being just all around awesome is the stuff of idle daydream fantasies. There isn’t any conflict or drama, and Evangeline is so together and with it and sparkly that my eyes started glazing over.

The story is told in journal format with Evangeline relating all the cool stuff that happens to her. She has a loving group of friends and guys falling over themselves to be with her. Even her guy troubles are great. She has a rock star lover and a longtime friend fighting over her.

The story is hard to follow due to a lack of proper paragraph breaks. There is no indentation and spotty line breaks between paragraphs (sometimes there is one, most times not). She doesn’t separate out dialogue consistently, so conversations will take place in single paragraphs, which makes it difficult if not impossible to tell who says what. In addition, a predominance of telling and not showing holds the reader back from the story and contributes to glazing eye syndrome.

Overall, I’m afraid I can’t recommend this story. I wish the writer the best of luck and hope she continues to have fun writing.

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