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Lost Days by Karma Girl

"When one and one shall meet, if both submit all shall fall..." 

The Party Girl killer strikes fear in the hearts of New Orleanians causing problems for the vampires who secretly control the city.  Meanwhile, the Order of Mages seeks two lost sorceresses, twin souls decended from an ancient sorcerer destined to bring about hell on earth.  Vampire and private detective Malcolm is hired to find the lost souls and discovers the recent killings might be connected.

Note: Lost Days is unfinished, with no recent updates.  It contains some graphic sexual content, graphic violence, and harsh language.


A serialized novel, with no recent updates

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Listed: Dec 18, 2008

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A lot to be gained by reading "Lost Days"

Editor: Gavin Williams
January 2, 2009

"Lost Days" has a lot of potential.  It features multiple characters, from vampires to magicians, in a modern setting.  While the entire text needs a good job of editing (parades have routs instead of their usual routes, and the only Santa Clause I know is a movie) the narrative voice itself is very strong and engaging.

I resist any story about vampires on principle, but certain characters make it worthwhile.  Dori, a girl transformed at the age of ten ages ago, has a particularly interesting skewed perspective, and is so far my favourite thing about the story.  She collects junk from dumpsters and wears old watches up and down her arms:  the first was from a fellow vampire to warn her of daybreak, and the rest because she likes collecting things.  As a result, it’s hard for her to keep track of the time.  She’s a charming creation, and a sign of the author’s potential for originality.

My only complaints so far are about the text’s need for editing, and the author’s tendency to jump narratives in the middle of a chapter:  she’ll go from Dori’s explorations right to a girl named Eve’s night at a club, without any transition or marker to denote the change.  Making scene changes like this more obvious by ending a chapter or using *** or a ruled line would help differentiate the text.  Technical details like these are a minor problem, however, when the story itself is engaging and well-paced.

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Ghosts and vampires of New Orleans

Editor: Linda Schoales
March 6, 2009

“Lost Days” is a very good horror/fantasy set in New Orleans, among the vampires and ghosts.  There’s a large cast of distinct characters —some mortal, many not— and several intertwining plot lines.  Among the non-mortals, there’s politics, alliances and troublemakers.  For the mortals, there’s parties and the Party Girl Killer.  For both, there are signs that a war may be [more . . .]

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