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Dead Drop by Zachary N. DiPego

Brother, can you spare a bullet? 

A past that can damn him and no future, Trey has to act. What would you do? On the run and homeless. You would grab at every opportunity like it was your last. This is the last chance for Trey.

Dead Drop is a fiction blog, a modern Noir set in Santa Monica and Los Angeles, California. Listinged every Tuesday and Friday, the story follows Trey through the double-crosses, brutal violence and small glimmers of hope in the big city.

Note: Dead Drop contains pervasive harsh language; also, some graphic violence.


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Listed: May 13, 2009

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Interrupting the Drop

By Linda Schoales, editor

Nov 5, 2009: “Dead Drop” is the story of Trey, a 20-year old drifter in LA, who finds something stashed in the park that he thinks is going to be his ticket to a better life. He’s come in on the middle of a “drop” and figures he can squeeze somebody for some cash. Unfortunately, he already has people after him and this little package just adds to his troubles.

The story is told in first person by Trey and it’s mostly a monologue of what’s in his head. It’s like a journal or a letter addressed to an unknown person. There are short snatches of dialog and brief action sequences but it’s mostly about what Trey is thinking. He even refers to himself by name sometimes.

Trey is an interesting character. He’s both articulate and rough. There’s a lot of coarse language and violent thoughts but the writing is solid and smoother than you might expect. Trey comes up with some surprising bits of knowledge and spends a lot of time analysing other people, their motives and their lives. He has big dreams but no real plans as to how to bring them about. He “talks” like he’s a tough guy with a short fuse and dangerous past, but he seems to be using a lot of self-talk to build himself up. There’s a lot of repetition of certain themes, such as his father having served in Vietnam, and his own skill in survival. He seems to feel contempt for most of the people he meets unless he decides they’re tough, like him. The other characters don’t even have names, just titles that Trey gives them, like the Nerd, Tokyo and Rodeo.

I have to admit I could only stand to be in Trey’s head for a chapter or two at a time. His bragging and swearing got to me after that. In fact I stopped reading after 8 chapters. That may also be because I don’t like reading white text on a black background. If you like character driven stories told in first person, you may find “Dead Drop” interesting. The character was certainly vivid if not particularly pleasant company.

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Down and out in Santa Monica

By Fiona Gregory, editor

May 18, 2009: This is a story in its early stages as of this review (May 2009), but one I really like so far.

A street-smart young man, Trey, is on the run, for reasons we’ve not been told yet. He’s sleeping rough in a city park, when he notices a mysterious package hidden in the leaves, and figures he can blackmail whoever comes to pick it up. But so far the plan isn’t going too well, and it looks like his past is [more . . .]

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