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Spoils of War by Elenia Turner

 

When Andromeda was twelve, her town was attacked.
 When Andromeda was thirteen, she started to build her army.
 When Andromeda was fourteen, she got control of her town.

Now, a decade later, her town is under attack once again, and this time she will defend it.

Note: Spoils of War is unfinished, and will likely remain so.  It contains pervasive graphic violence; also, some harsh language.


An abandoned novel

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Listed: Mar 26, 2012

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Editor’s First Impression

By Fiona Gregory, editor

Feb 25, 2013: Spoils of War depicts a harsh world. Atrocities are commonplace, weakness is despised, daily survival is by the skin of your teeth. It reminds me of Frank Herbert’s "The Dosadi Experiment". The four chapters posted so far are quite powerful and unnerving.

The thing that I need to be convinced of, is how Calista/Andromeda managed to rise to a such a position of dominance and authority in this cutthroat world at her young age. She’d been "vicious", we’re told, but that seems to be the norm in this world. In the prologue, when she is a child victim, it’s hinted there’s something special about her, and there are people with psychic powers in this world, so perhaps an explanation along those lines is forthcoming. I fear we’re already veering dangerously into Mary Sue territory. But the writing is strong, and the setting interesting, so this story will be worth checking out if the author decides to continue with it.

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Spoiled potential

By G.S. Williams, author of No Man An Island

Mar 29, 2012: "Spoils of War" got my attention in the very first chapter and lost it by the third. The reasons for both provide clues to what great writing can and cannot be.

First: the prologue features a scene where invaders find a lone sleeping girl during a raid and creep up on her. What they do to make her scream is left to the imagination, but the horror of it is palpable. The scene is well written, so cleanly descriptive you can picture every tense moment. The story is alive and frightening. As a reader you are shown everything you need to see to be affected, but not so much as to be gratuitous or wasteful.

Second: every chapter after that tells you details instead of showing you actions. It is expository about feelings, relationships, orders and decisions. Past events are hinted at, there’s the suggestion of interesting events, but hinting about them rather than showing them when the story is still being established is frustrating to read. There are spelling and grammar errors to boot.

Ultimately the writer’s first chapter shows ability, and could be a primer on how they can achieve their potential. Every chapter I read after that was an example of potential being wasted, which in some ways is worse than lacking talent altogether.

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