“Destined Book One: Fate” is a fantasy novel set on an island that has been hit by a terrible storm.  Tylor manages to sleep through the destruction and wakes to find his father missing.  He and his friend Joel discover that the storm only affected the area around their village.  His father has died in the prologue, fighting some kind of assassin who uses his Aura, which sounds a lot like a glowing, purple version of the Force. 

I found this story a hard read and stopped after chapter 2, or about 16,000 words.  The writing is very rough, full of grammatical mistakes, awkward wording, and misused punctuation.  Things are over-described, conversations are described instead of written as dialog, and there are paragraphs of infodump scattered throughout. 

I’m afraid I can’t think of anything else to say about this story.  It may get better, but I won’t be reading any further.

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The writing is shaky and occasionally difficult but not impossible—and I sense that with time and practice the author may improve. What’s needed is a good editor who can prune some parts and help the author expand on others. With the author’s clear sense of direction and straightforward prose (yes, there are paragraphs that aren’t bad) this is not a [more . . .]

I have to give Linda credit for getting as far as she did. This is a difficult read at best. I agree with everything she says about the style itself, though I see potential in the story. This work needs the talents of both a good proofreader and an even better editor.

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