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THE LIFTING OF THE VEIL

Has Potential

Editor: Miladysa
November 26, 2008

With 19 chapters at the time of this review, the author has set the scene well for what could be a great story.  The tension is building and I am looking forward to finding out what happens next. 

I like most of the characters and there are a couple that could become favourites.  The author has a dry sense of humour which shines through and helps to lighten the heavy subject of a post-apocalyptic world.

This review is not all sunshine and light though.  There is a problem with tense changes here and there and the writing could do with tightening in places.  I understand that this is something the author is working on at the moment.

A lot of thought has gone into the design and layout of the site itself and it is easy to navigate.

All in all I think this story has a lot of potential and my fingers are crossed that it delivers.

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