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A RAVELING NIGHT

Flashes of lightning

By theredsheep, author of Pyrebound

Mar 30, 2019: Imagine watching a battle at night during a thunderstorm. Everything appears in bursts: heaps of hacked bodies, their blood trickling into the puddled water on the ground. Blue flashes reflecting off shining swords. Screams of men and horses mixing with the howl of wind and the clap of thunder. It’s all very vivid, very intense. But you’d be hard-pressed to tell anyone what exactly was happening, which side was winning, or what it was for.

I picked up this story because it had a vivid blurb, written more or less exactly the way they tell you blurbs are supposed to be written. I clicked through to a professional-looking site, with a nice map and pictures and even an official teaser trailer. I read a story, written in perfectly manageable chunks, with good grammar and spelling. The writing was evocative, rich with emotion, pithy in its description of scenes and moments. Snow, mead, woodsmoke, steel, fog and clouds—it’s all gorgeously bleak and tragic and Nordic.

I’m just not at all sure what’s going on, because it’s all flashes of lightning. You see moments—nicely written moments!—interspersed with dollops of backstory, but not much straightforward description of the plot. It’s all alluded to en passant, never told. You have to infer what’s going on from the wry curses and fears characters express as asides, or else guess based on tropes. The runaway magic girl is apparently the protagonist, since she’s written with sympathetic traits. There’s a stern warlord after her, who’s bad because stern warlord.

Halfway through its current run of seventeen short chapters, I pieced together a bit more than that, but it’s so staccato that I didn’t have much invested in it. There’s no time to stop and breathe, to find out the big picture or what’s at stake. There used to be an unpopular queen, but I’m not at all clear what she was queen of, or why they don’t like her now. There’s people fighting, but I don’t know what they’re fighting for. Everyone feels doomed and hopeless, like the world is ending, and I don’t know why.

Just for example: in the second chapter, a lone headless body rides into a stableyard and falls off its horse, scaring the hell out of the local help . . . and that’s it. That’s the entire chapter, start to finish. She just describes it more artfully. There is no further context given as to why this corpse is significant, and it doesn’t come up later. I didn’t even feel the need to say spoilers, because what are you supposed to do with this information?

Three stars is "worth a look." It’s certainly that. But mind the rain.

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THE OSCILLATION

People turn into rabbits (and other animals)

By GriKit, member

Mar 29, 2019: It’s a story about a Korean girl in America called Rachel. Everything is all normal, until it’s not. It’s a fast-paced story that kicks off really fast in the first chapter. People turn into animals suddenly.

It’s weird. But fun.

The style is very descriptive and nice. The dialogue maybe needs some work, and the flow of the text isn’t always easy to read because the lines are so long.

But overall, the author is a good writer and you should check it out if you’re interested in a story like this.

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A RAVELING NIGHT

Vikings, sea monsters and wicked love – A Raveling Night by E.M Redshaw

By Storyworldofem, author of A Raveling Night

Mar 28, 2019: A Raveling Night is the book I’ve always wanted to read.

Viking clans in constant rivalry, underdogs, warriors, found families, magic, (anti)heroes with sad and dark pasts, forbidden love stories, mythology inspired by my norse ancestors, a fantasy apocalypse, dragons, sea monsters, toxic family relationships and wonderful family relationships . . . 

It’s a story about finding where you belong in a world that wishes you dead.

About being different, fighting adversity, finding home, and loving yourself for who you are. About weak people that become strong.

They told me that if you don’t see the book you want to read in the shelf, you need to write it yourself.

A Raveling Night is ultimately the most perfect book I know, because I wrote it. I’m kidding, it’s not perfect.

But it’s everything I’ve always wished for in a fantasy story about vikings, sea monsters and wicked love.

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