I’ve read all eleven chapters.  The usual warning applies—this is a regularly updated serial so my review is subject to change.

So far Daniel hasn’t had any adventures.  The story moves at a slow pace which is not a bad thing, but all the same I didn’t really get interested in the tale until the fifth chapter or so. 

The writing itself could use a little work.  It needs to be tightened and there are some grammatical errors, but it’s not unreadable. 

We’ll see where it goes.

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